It wasn't all that bad... Until she started farting...
It wasn't all that bad... Until she started farting...
I personally think it's too abstract, what I mean is, the story is good, but is being cut off because she just suddenly starts too bleed out of her eyes and dies, without a good reason.
If the story where to continue from the moment she saw what was happening, things would get more interesting, as maybe she would try to resolve the situation, or she would just go home and be traumatized by the event and have nightmares because of it, or she would encounter a new situation like the one she just saw. All three more interesting than her just dieing form looking at it.
The close-up shots and buildup were pretty good, but the story is just too boring. As revenge on blowing up the submarine they let the ship blow up, that's about it. You should make the story (although it doesn't have to be a long one and can still be good silent) more interesting.
It does not make sense, that's why it's no good. It's as simple as that.
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There seems to be an open ending, but I think the therapists will get Tommy out of the closet.
I don't like fartjokes. I know it's universal comedy, but it's also low-IQ comedy. It's just unpleasant and I really don't get the point of it.
I think it would be better if there was some sort of a story. So if the main character survived longer, or if, when he is replaced (cause he died) the story would still logically continue: There needs to be a connection between what previously happend and what happens next, by means of side characters who show themselves often, or repeating environment (like the same process which repeats itself a little differently every time.)
It's hard to let a series of random events be funny, but I think you managed it.
Every event followed the previous so smoothly (almost natural) and that's why most scenes didn't feel like a rushed attempt to be funny.
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The knight tries to impress his father, but his father doesn't want wealth and money, but beauty. The drawing of the knight when he was younger was so bad, his father didn't appreciate it. I think he realizes this when he gets older, and tries to make something beautiful despise his father now being unable to see it.
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